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Twinkle twinkle falling star
Oh, I wonder if you are
He who called with steady voice
Offering me one simple choice
Shall I stay or better leave?
Contemplatively I breathe

Now to bed I close my eyes
Think of you across the skies
I forgive you, now you know
My chosen path is that I go
One breath. Two breath. Three breath. Four
Eternal sleep, forevermore

Twinkle twinkle trusted friend
Take me there, to where it ends
Shining down your soft, white light
It calms me now and dulls my fright
Down below in bed I lie
With comforted heart I say goodbye
This is for the #Live-Love-Write writing prompt. I really tried to keep this one upbeat but it took a crazy left turn. the prompt is Write anything that features one or more of the following:
- a falling star
- a life-changing choice
- a mysterious phone call
- the phrase "I forgive you"
I tried to use everything in the prompt as always.

Update: A daily deviation whaaaaat!?!? I'm so excited! I've never had so many comments on one of my poems. Thanks everyone!
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Given 2014-02-18
Lullaby Bye by gadsdy A lovely rhythm matched with a tender message. ( Featured by GrimFace242 )
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QueenTiara Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2014  Student

Oh gosh. I was attracted to the title and what the preview showed "Hey this sounds like a nursery rhyme!" and clicked on it.

It's soo much better than what I was expecting. I didn't know this was even a DD but after I read it, now I know.

Beautiful poem~ Clap 

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gadsdy Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2014
Thank you!
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QueenTiara Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2014  Student
Love 
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drako8045 Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
most beautiful song/poem ever
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gadsdy Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014
Thanks!
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drako8045 Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
no,thank you
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HershieKiss Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Oh my gosh!!! This is absolutely gorgeous! Its no wonder you got a daily deviation ~! Very well done!
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gadsdy Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014
Thank you!
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Jazzieiest Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
This is....I just can't even put in words how great this is :)
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gadsdy Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014
Thanks very much!
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